Writing is GOLD

This week with Ms Wrack we had started to find ways how to write and why we need to read our writing. She taught us that our is gold we have to read our write like its GOLD and write like its gold. Here is my piece of writing. 

I felt the freezing cold water crash between my legs

I saw soldiers charging towards a safe place to save their lives

I heard intense piercing gun shots passing my ear and heading towards the air.

I felt my chest pounding so momentary like it never happened in my life.

I saw bullets sticking out from my friends deformed body 

I heard soldiers scream in a displeasing way. 

I smelt gun smoke coming behind me almost about to destroy my lungs.

I tasted the salt water coming from the ocean and about to give me a heart attack